lawl, new poems!

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lawl, new poems!

Postby Meer » 23 Dec 2008, 20:24

I dunno 'bout these... thoughts are welcome XD
I wrote 'em at work so I was kinda distracted.

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Memory's a fickle lot
a shining love or inky blot
to hold one close, or leave one behind
becomes the battle of the mind

A single thought transformed to brilliant life
of hidden love or painful strife
held in one's mind, without regard
for passing time or deepened scars

We help them grow, in turn they sow
that which we are, when change doth crow
when love grows old and time a chore
these simple thoughts we still adore

but all they are, will they ever be
nothing more than memories
so hold them close and love them dear
keep them strong, true and clear

yet more is to come, this much is true
before you're done and life is through
make the most of what you've got
find the love, avoid the blot

A memory is but a thought
a single piece of what we've got
see your life as what it will be
leave the past, go be free

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All things fall into the night
time comes to pass in endless flight

and in this darkness spawned by heavy hand
we hear the march of sightless bands, calling forth the sins of man

all comes to chaos, justice scorned
where unity demands one conform

This is how the world ends, as all things one day must
ashes layer ashes and dust covers only dust

Let them win for peace's sake
Let them come, Let them take

This is not how I wish to go
letting others die, so peace will grow

When faced with only screeching night
stand your ground and bring the light
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Postby Dickson » 24 Dec 2008, 01:15

Not bad.  I liked the second one better, it was simpler and more direct.  With the first I had problems with the, what's the word for the way it flows or rolls off the tongue? The meter?  Anyway, it didn't seem to flow for me.   The subject and the imagery were fine though.
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Postby Meer » 24 Dec 2008, 11:42

Yeah,

Neither of them were my best work. But eh, they can't all be great x3


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